Here is my post for week 24 on Jingle’s Poetry Rally. This is a poem that is on this blog with pictures from earlier but I want to repost just the words for the rally because it is so special to me. Just to have it read is prize enough because this has been in my life for quite some time and has always stirred up emotions. I am happy to share a piece of my heart with my poet friends in honor of Jingle’s new and improved poetry rally which I hope I can live up to.(and in honor of the one it was written for) asa
PRECIOUS STAR
Once upon a time a Star fell from the sky
A Star whose light did briefly shine
Obscured from sight, but for the few
Whose lives were blessed by one small glimpse
Of such a precious Star
That quickly passed us by
So much was changed but how much more
Had you our fallen Star, shined for all instead.
6 grains of sand in the hour-glass of time, Oh God! So few!
Eternity, speculations, memories, so much more
But none of them free from the agony, and wonder
Of how it all should have been
You O Star so simple and polite,
Free from the cares and concerns of so many
Happy to shine with love in spite of the pain
Free to fly on the wings of the wind
How then you who make us so happy
Why are we so sad now instead?
The grief of life is the loss of one so short,
Yet in loss you have become larger than life
Your light shined so brightly,your flame flared up
and we all were amazed,….Then poof!! You disappeared.
Now I can only dream of the man you will become,
and wait until our time together in eternity.ilu asa
Wow..Powerful !!! This has truly touched my heart. So well written 🙂
Thank you for your kind comments, they mean a lot. asa
The emotion here is quite strong!
A good job of relating how specail this star was to you, it is palpable.
Thank you very much, and yes the emotions connected with this poem are strong, way too strong! asa
Yes this poem was written in tears. Words will never be adequate to tell how special this Star is to me. asa
great distant star that once shine upon us- great work buddy!
Thank you, and that Star still shines brightly in my heart today. asa
[…] Alan:https://ncbeachcomber.wordpress.com/2010/06/30/precious-star-2/ […]
Great question asked in your verse about how one who makes others happy can be so sad. Wish I knew the answer to that. Your poem is very emotional and well done. thanks
He who made others happy was happy, others were only sad once he was gone. asa
brilliant!
Thank You. asa
aaww..sweeett…
completely touched…
here from Jingle’s Rally
you can check my poem at
http://megzone.wordpress.com/2010/07/01/thursday-poets-rally-footboard-traveller/
Thank You I am glad it you liked it. asa
what beautiful poem,
love the idea that a star lives short life, but its light lasts for some…
excellent words.
Thank you very much. This poem turns a terrible negative into positive energy that is to help others. The Star is someone precious lost a long time ago who still shines brightly in my life today. Each grain of sand is one year. I love poetry because you can hide the meaning so deep that it is often overlooked. thanks asa
Great post!
tight with emotion and wonderfully written…beautiful…
WOW!!! This is superlative! I loved it!!! Flowing emotion brought forth via brilliant lines!!!
Here’s one from me, something in conjunct with your poem… something which on reading yours, made me realize how alike can some people can think! Thank you for making me feel what I just felt..
http://kavisionz.wordpress.com/2010/06/14/so-far-yes-so-far/
Hope you have a wonderful July…
Best Wishes!!!
This is a great poem. Thank you for sharing with us.
It is a pleasure to share, I hope that I can encourage heavy hearts. Life is hard and some poems are written beautifully from within the crucible of pain, and it is a mystery how this type of poem comes to life so differently from the way it is created. Thank You, asa
very good poem!!!! i love the way you use words…. here from Jingle’s…. *wink*
Thank you for the sweet comments, they mean a lot to me. asa
Oh, this is so lovely and that Little Star shines so bright through your words….blessings and thank you for the lesson
to always appreciate the stars that surround us….bkm
http://signedbkm.blogspot.com
Thank you for your kind comments. That is what I hope for, to keep that Little Star shining bright forever. thank you, asa
Oh little star that shines so bright — wont you come back tonight — oh so beautiful and enchanting with a tender soulful overtone.
thanks,
Joanny
Thank you. I do look often for falling stars in the night sky and wish that this Star would come back. asa
What a very special poem, and I can see why it has your heart in it. 🙂 Thank you for sharing it, and Shine away. 🙂
Thank you so much. It has been very special to be able to share this here. I am glad you see the deeper meaning, it was hard to polish all of the sharp edges off of this one. asa
Asa,
Thank you for this. It is beautiful, and I understand completely the emotions behind it. Bless you, my friend.
Rhyme on!
Tim Keeton
(Undead)Poet / Wizard / Teller-of-tales
Thank You for your kind comments I appreciate them deeply. alan
Congratulations for winning the Perfect Poem Award 🙂
Thank you, just being here makes all of us winners. alan
Don’t tell me this was a child. Just too powerful and in a way, so sad!
You deserve all the praise.
yes Thank you for your kind comments, alan
Happy July 4th!
Thank You and Happy 4th to you as well, may it be the best ever.
http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2010/07/jingles-july-follower-awards-happy-4th.html
AWARDS,
PLEASE PICK 2 TO 5 TO ACCEPT,
THANK YOU!
Very beautiful…thank you for sharing.
Thank you for your kind comment.
alan
very moving!
thank you
i like the part about the 6 grains of sand 🙂
Thank you, that line says a lot. alan
this is really, really beautiful.
Thank you so much for all of your kind comments. I try hard to honor all poets here by visiting and commenting, I hope I do enough for you and everyone because you are so very nice to me. I appreciate it and I will continue to support all of this as much as I can. I often cannot be on the computer every day but I try. I love all you said and you are great too!!!I love Jingle a lot too, she is the Best!!!!!!
alan
Very powerful!
Definitely subscribing to your blog. Great stuff! 😀
i hope the star shines as brightly as it does now…always…beautiful poem:)
http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2010/07/pinks-in-6-words-i-wish-u-award-winning.html
hope that you enjoy some,
Happy Sunday!
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/07/11/happy-belated-birthday-plus-get-well-soon-wishes-4-five-friends/
please help visit 5 people,
wishing them Happy Belated Birthday or Get Well Soon.
Thank you in advance!
cheers!
very very powerful………………… 🙂 drew vivid images in mind..
Hello, friend, how are you?
I invite you to our Monday Poetry Potluck Party at Jingle Poetry Community, a new place for poets who share ans encourage…
We have features such as poem of the week, poetry blog of the week, and poet of the week, plus Sunday poetry news dispatch, if you attend our Monday Party, there is a chance that you poetry blog is represented by one of our officials, and your talent will be highlighted or exposed to wider audience,
No specific rules, simply linking in 1 to 3 poems, it could be an old poem, let us read and comment for you. Feel free tasting other poetry treats, all enjoyable expereicne…
http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/09/poetry-potluck-big-bang.html
Click on the link, you will see a blue button, click on the blue button, you will see three boxes, your specific poem link to be placed in first, then your name or blog name, then your email connected to your blog….
Happy Monday!
Let the fun begin!
Cheers!